Spanish help??

It sounds allright but in spanish we don't use too many sentences in one single paragraph. The way I learned this is to use a "," (comma) instead of "." (period) and keep the sentences open. Like: "Soy optimista, tengo ojos oscuros, soy de baja estatura y me gusta leer." The only time we brake sentences in Spanish is when you change the topic. Like: "Soy una persona optimmista, tengo ojos oscuros y soy de baja estatura. Me gusta leer libros infantiles."